"Enough is Enough"

Subject: "Enough is Enough" Tue Oct 22, 2013 1:39 pm

*Raw rolls in from a commercial break. It starts with Triple H walking backstage looking pissed off with his signature sledgehammer grasped by his right hand. It looks like Hunter was searching for a certain person.*

*Hunter asks employees and staff about if they've seen Cody Rhodes anywhere in this building*

Triple H: "Hey you! Yeah you! Have you seen Rhodes? No? Then find him!"

*Triple H tries to find more staff to ask for information about Cody's whereabouts. Until Dolph Ziggler passed by him. Triple H stopped, and looked back at Ziggler. He saw Dolph walking more quick then he would usual. Then, Triple H headed for him and later caught up to him*

Triple H: "Hey Ziggy Boy, have you seen Cody anywhere?"

*Ziggler didn't respond. Dolph flinched while trying to escape Hunter. Triple H then grabs Dolph's shirt and pinned him against the wall and Dolph cringed*

Triple H: "Now that you are in a compromising position, I'll ask that same question again. Where Is Cody!"

*Dolph looks at Triple H with a grin*

Dolph: "Why should I tell you Hunter, I'm not scared of you. You've been absolutely nothing but a loser in WCF. All you ever did lately is LOSE. So my answer is simple very simple, that's gonna happen."

*Dolph pushes Hunter to get himself down. But Triple H grabs him again and pins him harder into the wall*

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Triple H: "Look Dolph, that shit doesn't work on me anymore. I've lost sympathy a couple of weeks ago because of Cody, Brock... and you. So if you think I'm gonna let you out of this, then you've been hanging with AJ a little too much. I'm tired of your shit Dolph, so this is your last time I'm gonna ask this question. Where is Cody?"

*Dolph roles his eyes. He opens his mouth beginning to talk*

Triple H: "Whoa, whoa, whoa. Before you even say one more word Dolph, check your surroundings. Because that could change your answer."

*Triple H lifts up his sledgehammer near Dolph's face*

Triple H: "Does this change your thought Dolph?"

*Dolph begins to sweat. Looking at Hunter and his weapon makes him gulp.*

Dolph: "Ok, fine. You have your way this time. He's about to have a interview with Josh Matthews at the other side of the arena."

Triple H: "See, that wasn't that bad."

*Triple H lets Dolph down. Then Ziggler was about to leave until...*

Triple H: "Dolph, thanks. Oh yeah, here's a present from me to your pal Brock."

*Triple H hit Dolph straight in the face with his sledgehammer, and Dolph drops dead like a fly*

Triple H: "Tell him that was for 2 weeks ago."

*Triple H leaves Dolph, and heads towards Cody. The scene ends when the camera looks down to Dolph and fades.

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Subject: Re: "Enough is Enough" Tue Oct 22, 2013 3:00 pm

This was a nice lead up man, I only have one suggestion;

Try not to mix past tense with present tense. Example; *Triple H hit Dolph straight in the face with his sledgehammer, and Dolph drops dead like a fly*

*Triple H hit Dolph straight in the face with his sledgehammer,
This is past tense

and Dolph drops dead like a fly*
This is present tense

You did it a few times throughout the promo. It made it hard to read at times, but other than that, it was awesome.

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DJ wrote:: This was a nice lead up man, I only have one suggestion;

Try not to mix past tense with present tense. Example; *Triple H hit Dolph straight in the face with his sledgehammer, and Dolph drops dead like a fly*

*Triple H hit Dolph straight in the face with his sledgehammer,
This is past tense

and Dolph drops dead like a fly*
This is present tense

You did it a few times throughout the promo. It made it hard to read at times, but other than that, it was awesome.

Grammar Nazi...jk But on the real I enjoyed the promo and could see trips acting like this. Good job broo

Subject: Re: "Enough is Enough" Wed Oct 23, 2013 4:54 am

You were right, I am sorry. I left.