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Subject: By The People, For The People! Sat Nov 16, 2013 10:35 am
Jack raises his right arm up into the air, pushing himself off the mat using The Undertaker's unconscious body. Coulter makes his way up the steel steps and down the apron, ducking under the top rope. He walks over to Jack and makes sure he's okay, patting him on the back and congratulating him on his hard fought victory. Swagger screams out, beating his chest numerous times. Undertaker rolls about on the mat, still a bit weary from Swagger's intense beating. Coulter snatches the ring announcers mic and tells him to beat it, pointing to the announcers table. He then hands the mic to Jack and once more pats him on the back.
Swagger
And once again, Jack Swagger proves why he's a REAL American! There's nobody in the locker room that can contest with myself. And that's because everyone in the back is fake. They're frauds, phony's, posers. The biggest of them all being Hulk Hogan. Who each and every week since he first debut claims he's a real American and that he fights for our flag. Claims that he fights for the rights of every man. Claims that he fights for what's right! Yet he stands in this ring and does NOTHING about the army of illegal immigrants infesting our country. He in fact supports it! That is not a real American ladies and gentleman, that's a monster. Your kids are being forced to listen to his slander! Your little Johnny or Lauren, who look up to this man, are being brainwashed! But myself and Zeb, cannot and shall not stand idly by while he does this. We are going to do our duties as REAL Americans and end his blight. That's why in two weeks time at Survivor Series, I am going to end Hulk Hogan's career! And if you don't believe me, well. . . Here's a taste!
Jack turns to Coulter and nods, handing him the microphone. The fans are in a sour mood, booing and chanting, "Swagger sucks, Swagger sucks!" Jack stares down at Undertaker, who is still laid out on the mat. Meanwhile, Zeb makes his way to the outside of the ring. He walks over to the time keepers area and demands a steel chair. Once he's given once he proceeds to re-enter the ring. Swagger is now hovering over Taker, his eyes as wide as can be. Coulter shouts out, "by the people, for the people!" He then clamps the steel chair around Undertaker's left ankle, smiling all the while. Jack tells him to back up a bit and he does. Once Zeb's behind Swagger, the all American American beats his chest and let's out a mighty roar, slamming his foot down onto the steel chair with all his might. Undertaker begins to flip and turn, scratching and clawing at his wounded ankle. His cries of pain echo out and the fans receive them. They send back a wave of hate towards Jack, who's stalking Taker with vicious eyes. Zeb yells at him, "finish him off, Jack!" Swagger is more than happy to complie, once more stomping on Taker's hurt ankle before grabbing it and yanking it up into the air. He's got a firm ankle lock locked in. He twists and bends The Dead Man's foot, laughing as he hears his shrikes of pain. He holds the lock in tight, getting down on the mat so that he gets as much leverage as possible. Taker attempts to grab the bottom rope, but his hands are stomped on by a sharp Zeb. Finally, with one final twist, a snap is heard all throughout the arena. Gasps from the fans and staff alike are almost simultaneous. Undertaker, now free from Jack's clutch, hops up and down like a fish out of water. He grabs at his ankle, which is in a poor state to say the least. The medical staff hits the ring and makes their over to Taker, who's nearly passed out from the pain. Both Zeb and Jack, with smiles on their faces, exit the ring and stand on the outside looking in. Coulter raises the mic that's in his hand.
Zeb
We the people!
With that, Zeb and Jack retreat up the ramp way, passing by the many unhappy fans in the front row. As they reach the top they can't help but smile, Jack's sweat dripping down his face in streams.
(Closed. Feedback would be great! 'Murica!)
Alveuss
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Subject: Re: By The People, For The People! Sat Nov 16, 2013 10:43 am
Hey genius, I think you got the names backwards
DJ
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Subject: Re: By The People, For The People! Sat Nov 16, 2013 10:49 am
What?
SlymR
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Subject: Re: By The People, For The People! Sat Nov 16, 2013 9:33 pm
I don't think you want my feedback. You couldn't handle it.
The Beast
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Subject: Re: By The People, For The People! Sun Nov 17, 2013 1:09 am
Good but Swagger had no pace in his promo just kept screaming one word after another.
Twysted
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Subject: Re: By The People, For The People! Sun Nov 17, 2013 1:56 am
Mark Henry wrote:
Good but Swagger had no pace in his promo just kept screaming one word after another.
But . . . isn't that a typical Swagger promo?
DJ
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Subject: Re: By The People, For The People! Sun Nov 17, 2013 2:41 am
^ And he has an entire paragraph of dialogue, so I don't know what promo you were reading. It's a Swagger promo, he kinda has to be in it.
Let me hear it SlymR, shower me with your hate.
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Twysted
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Subject: Re: By The People, For The People! Sun Nov 17, 2013 2:42 am
Yeah SlymR, I gave him a rant on his last promo. Your turn!!
SlymR
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Subject: Re: By The People, For The People! Sun Nov 17, 2013 3:36 am
Where to begin? Not only is your "promo" peppered with so many grammatical errors that it literally made me weep (his hands are stomped on by a sharp Zeb, really? How the fuck did you miss that one?) , but from a technical standpoint, you couldn't be further from the truth. I don't know if you've ever attempted an ankle lock in your life, but it is far easier to apply more torque to the ankle from a standing position, not on the ground. I shouldn't need to elaborate further on that, because if you haven't already figured out why, then there really isn't any hope for you. I shouldn't forget to mention that no-one in the history of anything ever has SCRATCHED an injured limb, so why the fuck did Undertaker?
Of course, there's also the fact that it appears you've never watched a Real Americans promo in your life either. Zen Coulter is the mouthpiece, not Jack can't-fucking-speak-without-it sounding-like-he's-in-the-middle-of-a-deepthroating-marathon Swagger, so why in the name of Jesus Christ, our Lord, Saviour, and Protector from Evil did Zeb's dialogue consist of only 13 words, while Jack Thwagger delivered a fucking monologue the likes of Shakespeare would envy?
In short, I couldn't feel further disconnected from the characters and the scene you failed to create. I can honestly say that I regret having read that abysmal display so much so that I have to actually applaud your ability to create such atrocities. If I had the choice between a cyanide pill and reading another of your "promos", I'd swallow that pill so fast it'd make the Spetsnaz jealous. If I were to rate it, 0 wouldn't be small enough a number, and it symbolizes, literally, fucking nothing.
You should be ashamed of yourself for foisting this upon us. May God have mercy on your soul, because for this you should burn in Hell for all eternity.
Twysted EDIT: TL;DR? In short, he liked it.
MercilessEarth
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Subject: Re: By The People, For The People! Sun Nov 17, 2013 3:42 am
i think if the goal here is to make Swagger look like a really dangerous threat, mission accomplished. Also a great way to explain Takers untimely... uh, absence, from the WCF. Hopefully somebody picks up Taker as a character again and he can come back and get revenge, because right now his character looks extremely weak after a strong introduction a few days ago.
DJ
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Subject: Re: By The People, For The People! Sun Nov 17, 2013 5:12 am
SlymR wrote:
Where to begin? Not only is your "promo" peppered with so many grammatical errors that it literally made me weep (his hands are stomped on by a sharp Zeb, really? How the fuck did you miss that one?) , but from a technical standpoint, you couldn't be further from the truth. I don't know if you've ever attempted an ankle lock in your life, but it is far easier to apply more torque to the ankle from a standing position, not on the ground. I shouldn't need to elaborate further on that, because if you haven't already figured out why, then there really isn't any hope for you. I shouldn't forget to mention that no-one in the history of anything ever has SCRATCHED an injured limb, so why the fuck did Undertaker?
Of course, there's also the fact that it appears you've never watched a Real Americans promo in your life either. Zen Coulter is the mouthpiece, not Jack can't-fucking-speak-without-it sounding-like-he's-in-the-middle-of-a-deepthroating-marathon Swagger, so why in the name of Jesus Christ, our Lord, Saviour, and Protector from Evil did Zeb's dialogue consist of only 13 words, while Jack Thwagger delivered a fucking monologue the likes of Shakespeare would envy?
In short, I couldn't feel further disconnected from the characters and the scene you failed to create. I can honestly say that I regret having read that abysmal display so much so that I have to actually applaud your ability to create such atrocities. If I had the choice between a cyanide pill and reading another of your "promos", I'd swallow that pill so fast it'd make the Spetsnaz jealous. If I were to rate it, 0 wouldn't be small enough a number, and it symbolizes, literally, fucking nothing.
You should be ashamed of yourself for foisting this upon us. May God have mercy on your soul, because for this you should burn in Hell for all eternity.
Twysted EDIT: TL;DR? In short, he liked it.
Jealous much? Edit: Zeb's been giving Jack speech lessons. Another edit: Also, where is there a grammatical error in that?
iB u n k a
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Subject: Re: By The People, For The People! Sun Nov 17, 2013 5:42 am
SlymR wrote:
Zen Coulter is the mouthpiece
>Zen Coulter >Zen
lel.
MercilessEarth
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Subject: Re: By The People, For The People! Sun Nov 17, 2013 6:15 am
