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Subject: Return of an Olympic Hero Tue Nov 12, 2013 1:59 pm
The show comes back from a commercial break, and the camera is scanning the crowd. The earlier action has the crowd going tonight, and they are eager for the show to continue. Everything is standing still for a few seconds as the crowd starts to buzz. Then the music hits....
The crowd erupts, everyone cheering for Kurt Angle making his surprise WCF debut!
As he hits the entrance ramp, the crowd hits a fever pitch. Standing at the top of the ramp the crowd begins to chant and cheer...
Crowd: YOU SUCK!....YOU SUCK!....YOU SUCK!.....YOU SUCK!
Angle soaks in the crowd, jumps around then throws his index fingers to the skies as single shot fireworks shoot off behind him in red, white, and blue.
Angle makes his way to the ring, grabs a mic and prepares to speak, as the crowd begins to calm in anticipation of what Angle has to say...
Angle: Oh it's true! Crowd: It's damn true! Angle: The Olympic Hero, The Wrestling Machine, The Most Celebrated Real Athlete in Wrestling has made his way to the WCF!
Cole: You heard it everybody, Angle has come to the WCF!
Angle: Now despite the "talent", if you can call it that considering it's a bunch of washed up old timers, and despite the awful fanbase that is known for being some of the worst in the business, I've come to WCF to give everyone a wrestling lesson.
Angle quickly loses favor with the crowd as it's obvious he has no intentions of making friends with anyone
Angle: So I'm issuing an open challenge next week on RAW, to anyone man enough to take the challenge against an Olympic gold medalist, and who isn't afraid to have their damn ankle broken.
Kurt drops the mic as soon as he is done, and begins to walk towards the corner to leave the ring. The crowd turned quick and is raining down the boos from all areas of the stadium.
[PROMO IS NOW OPEN TO REPLY FROM ANYONE] [It is a bit short, but constructive criticism and tips or pointers are welcome]
iB u n k a
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Subject: Re: Return of an Olympic Hero Tue Nov 12, 2013 3:41 pm
Very good compared to what we've had in the past for peoples first works. We've had a couple one sentence promos before... yikes.
I like the use of the BBCode and the fact you got commentary and a good message across. It's always difficult to make a promo when you just enter the WCF so when you pair up with someone and get a feud going it will become much easier.
Keep it up!
Kurt Angle (Crim616)
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Subject: Re: Return of an Olympic Hero Tue Nov 12, 2013 3:55 pm
It took me about an hour to finally put down what I wanted into words, and it's still a bit underwhelming...I should get better the more I read these promos!
Suntanners
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Subject: Re: Return of an Olympic Hero Tue Nov 12, 2013 4:14 pm
Jack swagger vs angle must happen lol
MercilessEarth
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Subject: Re: Return of an Olympic Hero Tue Nov 12, 2013 5:39 pm
As Angle leaves the ringside area his exit is suddenly interrupted by the music of Curt Hennig. The crowd doesn't know what to make of Hennig's arrival.
Hennig gets to the top of the ramp with a mic in hand before beginning to speak.
Hennig Kurt, Kurt, Kurt. Don't get me wrong, I'm actually very pleased to see somebody with some legitimate abilities here in the WCF. I've long awaited the opportunity to step into the ring with the only Olympic Gold Medalist in our business.
Now, I realize I have a tough opponent for tonight already in the Miz, but when I'm finished with him tonight I want you in the ring next week on Raw. You see Kurt, you talk about the guys in the back being washed up oldtimers, and hey maybe you're right... with the exception of myself, naturally.
Some fans applaud, while there are murmuring boos in the background
I take exception to you saying you're here to give us a wrestling lesson. You can talk about the gold medal all you want Kurt; it doesn't change the fact that once you get between those ropes with me, you'll realize I don't need any special accolades to kick your ass.
The fans cheer and chant “Mr. Perfect, Mr. Perfect”... Hennig waits, emotionless for the fans to stop chanting
Hennig These idiots are eating out of my hand.
Cole: What a disgusting gesture by Hennig, insulting his own fans. The fans once again begin to boo in surprise
Hennig I'm not out here to pander to you pinheads in the bleachers. I'm here to issue a challenge from one athlete to another. It's not about who the fans like or dislike more, Kurt... I just want to know who the better man is between those ropes. If you're man enough, you'll take up the challenge. And hey, maybe you'll even learn a thing or two in the process from this so called “old timer”. So? How about it, American hero?
Cole: Hennig vs Angle? That match would be incredible! King: I don't know who to hate more, Cole...
(Promo open to reply from Kurt Angle)
Kurt Angle (Crim616)
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Subject: Re: Return of an Olympic Hero Tue Nov 12, 2013 6:34 pm
(Angle takes a few steps back and forth, before he finally returns to the mic.)
Curt, I respect the fact that you came all the way out here, without your walking cane at that...but I'm not so sure you know what you just walked in on.
Angle has started to make his way up the ramp at a slow pace
You see, Curt, I'm not just some notch in the belt. I'm an 11 time World Champion! And by my last count, that's almost 11 more than you. You may think you don't need any accolades now, but the fact of the matter is, I'm 11 times better than you in the business alone, and a gold medal better than you to every boy and girl in the U. S of A. and all around the world at that!
Angle, almost all the way up the ramp to Hennig at this point, pauses to look around at the crowd.
And if you're so damn sure....
At this point Angle is face to face with Hennig
...you have what it takes, to step into that ring with me, and leave with out a broken ankle........then I'll see you next Monday
Cole: Well there you have it! It looks like next Monday on RAW we will see Mr. Perfect Curt Hennig facing off against Kurt Angle in Angle's WCF debut.
After a bit more of a stare down, Angle leaves the entrance area as his music plays.
JOHNmicheals_CMpunk
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Subject: Re: Return of an Olympic Hero Wed Nov 13, 2013 2:04 am
You guys are both doing really well with this promo , expessially for first promos im impressed looking foward to what you guys are gunna bring to the table down the line , regaurdless glad you guys got a fued started , now yall might make the survivor series ppv card =D
DJ
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Subject: Re: Return of an Olympic Hero Wed Nov 13, 2013 5:16 am
This was great, guys. It's awesome that everyone's starting to get some feuds going! At this rate, Survivor Series is looking to be one of our best pay-per-views! Keep it up, I can't wait for the next one.
DieCobros
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Subject: Re: Return of an Olympic Hero Wed Nov 13, 2013 5:31 am
Cobros approved.
As a side note, centering your text makes the promo look better, at least to me anyways. You could do it either way though.
MercilessEarth
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Subject: Re: Return of an Olympic Hero Wed Nov 13, 2013 6:38 am
DieCobros wrote:
Cobros approved.
As a side note, centering your text makes the promo look better, at least to me anyways. You could do it either way though.
